Tuesday, February 3, 2015

Word Choice - NIMH

Find a brilliant example of word choice in this week’s text!  Look for examples of the author "showing - not telling" by using sensory details within their writing.
Write the entire sentence and explain why you chose it.  Please include page number.

Example:  

"Bob’s face went ashen. His breathing came in ragged gasps." p.36

15 comments:

  1. "His fever is so high that he's burning hot to touch"." His heartbeat?"asked Mr.Ages ." So fast you can't tell one from another " she replied. "And his tongue?" "So coated it looks purple" That's my word choice.

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  2. I chose ; 'I feel all right ,just cold , and dizzy when I get up .

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  3. my example is: his fever was so high that he feels burning hot to the touch, runs with perspiration, yet he shivers with cold just the same.his pulse was so fast that you cannot tell one heartbeat from the next.

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    1. We did kind of the same.

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    3. i forgot to mention, this was on page 18, paragraphs 5 ans 6.

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  5. this is on page 134.
    he went on.the shaft turned up at a sharp angle-and then, straight ahead,he saw it. a patch of light-colored darkness.i like this because it is detailed.

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  6. Dragon the cat had 7 claws on each claw and a thick furry tail. In color he was orange and white and when he leaped to kill, he gave a strangled scream that froze his victims where they stood. My second one, page 21 paragraph one.

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  7. also i think it is sort of dramatic. dun...dun...dun...

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  8. "January and February were the hardest months; the sharp, hard cold that began in December lasted until March and by February the beans and black-eyes had been picked over (with help from the birds), the asparagus roots were frozen into stone, and the potatoes had been thawed and refrozen so many times they had acquired a slimy texture and a rancid taste." (page 4, paragraph 2)

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